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I need someone to revise my paper please?! Very short!?


I need someone to revise my paper please?! Very short!?
Sarah Tyson Rorer was born in Richboro, Pennsylvania in 1849 as Sarah Tyson Heston. As a child she was fascinate with her fathers work as a chemist. Later in life she married and had 3 children, one died at a very young age. Wanting a healthier lifestyle for her and her children she began attending lectures at the Women’s Medical College and she started taking cooking classes. Form the classes she went on to teach her own cooking classes and founded the Philadelphia cooking school classes (1883- 1903). She became a teacher of domestic science and emphasized on nutrition and chemistry. She understood the connection between health and food and wanted that to be known. She had an advantage to getting her ideas to the public because she was also a popular advice columnist for Table Talk and editor to Ladies Home Journal. It is said that she paved the way for hospital dietetics and is considered America’s first dietician. She was most noted for her quick wits and strong opinions. She’s written over 50 cook books with her most famous being Mrs. Rorer’s New Cookbook: A Manual of Housekeeping. Sadly with the rest of America she fell victim to the Great Depression since by this time her marriage had dissipated. She lived with her son and depended on the help of a pension fund set up by former students until her death in 1937 at her home in Colebrook, Pennsylvania
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Very good but from in the 5th sentence is misspelled


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As a child she was fascinateD..... Later in life, (COMMA) she married and had three (type out three) children, one WHO died at a very young age. Wanting a healthier lifestyle for both her children and herself, she began attending lectures at the Women's Medical College and (no she) started taking cooking classes. FROM (not form) the classes, (comma) she went on to teach her own cooking classes and founded the Philadelphia Cooking School. (is classes neccessary?) She became... science, (comma) and SHE emphasized (leave out the on) nutrition and chemistry. She had an advantage to getting her ideas to the public because she was a popular advice columnist for Table Talk and also editor to Ladies Home Journal. It WAS (verb tense issue)... hope i helped :)

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